Sample Art Thesis Paper on Rosta Thesis Writing and Rewriting Forum

Rosta Thesis Writing and Rewriting Forum

The paper provides a brief history of the occurrence of the sculptures, assesses the evidence of their existence, and provides a discussion of their significance.  Kinoshita and Portal (2010) provide majority of insight into the history of China and the Terra-cotta army. In this paper, I seek to discuss the subject of individual and universal historical significance of the Terra-cotta figurines about the archeological evidence present.

Answer to questions

Does it make an assertion or claim?

The paper makes an assertion as it refers to information from other authors.

How is it supported by evidence from your sources?

It refers to Kinoshita and Portal as the providers of most of the information with regard to China and the Terra-cotta army. The article will also rely on Terra-cotta figurines regarding the archeological evidence present. The thesis is supported by the sources as its seeks to rely on evidence based information and historical perspectives that are had a universal significance.

Does it reflect your findings?

The thesis reflects on my personal significance as I will base the paper on personal and universal significance as well as the visible evidences that are available.

How does it show what the research suggests and how you’re going to answer your research question?

In stating the thesis, I start by explaining what the paper will provide in the assertion that “…will give a brief history…” This presents that in the initial part of the paper, the history and occurrence of sculptures will be discussed, the paper will further assess the evidence of their existence through research and other sources, the paper will further go into details to discuss the role of sculptures, as well as their importance to the cultures which they originate.

Does it indicate a specific topic?

The thesis statement presents a specific topic, occurrence of sculptures. Though during the thesis statement one of the sources used provides information of the history of China and Terra-cotta army, the discussion in the paper as stated in the first sentence of the thesis is about sculptures which Terra-cotta army is part of. 

Does it reflect a purpose such as to persuade, analyze, propose solutions, show cause/effect?

The thesis statement aims at informing the audience as well as show cause effect. By providing a history of the occurrence of sculptures the reader will be informed on the origin of sculptures and why they came into existence, the paper will further provide an assessment of the available evidence on the existence of these sculptures.

Does it use Concrete Language—Avoid Vague Words & Generalizations-avoid words such as interesting, great, good?

The thesis statement does not use concrete language as the there is the use of the world majority which is regarded as a generalization.

Does it include a significance or relevance?

The last part of the paper gives the significance of the entire discussion which can also be termed as the cause since it will outline what the society has benefitted from the sculptures or if there are any negative/mysterious happenings that can be associated with the sculptures.

What is the “so what?” factor?

The long standing impact of the thesis statement is not specified.

Does it fit the assignment?

 Though the prose adopted in the thesis is acceptable, it is subject to improvement to ensure it follows all the thesis statement requirements.

How is it appropriate for the scope of a 5-7-page essay?

The thesis statement does not satisfactorily address all the information that needs to be handled in a 5-7-page essay. It fits lesser pages as the details presents are not concrete enough to capture all the aspects of an essay paper more than five pages.

Revised thesis statement:

The paper aims at analyzing the origin of sculptures and their impact to the society in the present day societies. First, it provides a history of the occurrence of the sculptures, then assesses the evidence of their existence and lastly provides an in-depth analysis of the significance of these phenomenons in details. During research, this paper will rely on Kinoshita and Portal (2010) for information about the history of China and the Terra-cotta army. The general outcome of this paper is to outline individual and universal historical significance of the Terra-cotta figurines about the archeological evidence present.

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